Portable Trade Show

Dear ESL teachers, please help me proofread my following expression and polish my expression...Thanks a millio

We are so excited about the coming machinery exhibitions in your country where we may have more potential opportunities to promote ABC machines and expose ABC brand name to the worldwide. We truly understand that you may not only carry ABC machines at the exhibitions and you may promote other competitors' machines in the meanwhile, but we believe it will be a good marketing strategy if we propose to show ABC logos at the exhibition booth (please refer to the attached photo for your reference). According to the attached photos, you may have a brief idea on the ABC logos by which you need to be aware of the pantone-purple and the logo format. The predominate purpose of exposing ABC logos at the exhibitions is to draw all end-users' attentions and build up the global brand images in the machinery industry.Again, please kindly take photos of ABC logos on the exhibitions and send to us to show how well you present and expose ABC logos.

Public Comments

1. We are so excited about the coming machinery exhibitions in your country where we may have more potential opportunities to promote ABC machines and expose the ABC brand name to the world. We do understand that you may not only carry ABC machines at the exhibitions and you may promote other competitors' machines also; but we believe it will be a good marketing strategy if we display ABC logos at the exhibition booth (please refer to the attached photo for your reference). From the attached photos, you can get a brief idea of the ABC logos; paying close attention to the pantone-purple colours and shape of the logo. The predominate purpose of exposing ABC logos at the exhibitions is to draw all end-users' attentions by building up these global brand images in the machinery industry. Please kindly take photos of ABC logos on the exhibitions and send to us to show how well you present and expose them.
2. These are the changes I would make... You have excellent English skills, by the way. We are very excited about the upcoming machinery exhibitions in your country, as we hope to promote ABC machines and expose the ABC brand name to the world. We understand that you may not carry only ABC machines at the exhibitions, and you may promote other competitors' machines, but we believe it would be a good marketing strategy if we show the ABC logo at the exhibition booth (please refer to the attached photo for your reference). ...The next sentence is very awkward I'm not sure what you are trying to say. You definitely need to reword it because I don't really understand it. The predominate purpose of exposing the ABC logo at the exhibitions is to draw the end-users' attention and build up the global brand image of the logo in the machinery industry. If you would, please take some photos of the ABC logo at the exhibitions and send them to us so we can see them. The last sentence originally sounded a bit rude, like you were ordering them to do something. I'm sure you didn't mean it that way though, so I changed it.
3. Hello, While am not an ESL teacher, I am bilingual and work very successfully in marketing in the U.S. I hope this is helpful. (I agree with the person above. While English speakers may sound abrupt, it is still considered correct to be very polite in business transactions.)...:^) We are very excited about the coming machinery exhibitions in your country and the increased opportunities we will have to promote ABC machines. We feel confident that this opportunity will expose the ABC brand name to a worldwide audience. Although we understand that you will promote ABC machines at the exhibitions, you most likely will market other competitors' machines, as well. Because of this, we believe it will be a good marketing strategy for us to show ABC logos at the exhibition booth (please refer to the attached photo for your reference.) We hope you will find this suggestion acceptable. The predominate purpose of exposing ABC logos at these exhibitions is to draw all end-users' attentions to our products and build up our global brand images in the machinery industry. As you may already have noticed from the attached photos, the ABC logos make use of pantone-purple and our standardized logo format. It is important that these format standards be used. In addition, will you please take photographs of our ABC logos at the exhibitions, and then send a set of those photos to us so that we may assess how well the ABC logos were presented to the industry and any further refinements we may need to make for future exhibitions? Thank you very much for your assistance in this matter. We really appreciate your help. And, please, do not hesitate to contact us should you have any questions regarding the above information or requests.